2021-2022学年高一英语读后续写写法剖析与基础训练 亲情篇（1）讲义

高中英语读后续写 写法指导与基础训练

亲情篇(1)——出席妹妹的毕业典礼

【精美原文】

I always dreamed of giving someone a surprise, one that will be remembered for a lifetime. Well, thanks to a little determination, some luck, and some help of Christmas Spirit, my dream became a reality.（关键句）

[好词好句积累] 1.dream of 梦想着 2.thanks to幸亏，由于 3.became a reality成为现实

4.one that will be remembered for a lifetime (that引导的是定语从句) 一个会让人永生难忘的惊讶 [难词助读]

Christmas Spirit 圣诞精神

My family is Canadian, although my sister moved down to Australia a few years ago to further her study. She was graduating just before Christmas. However, due to my own school schedule back home, I would not be able to make it in time for her graduation. She was understandably disappointed, and I felt guilty that I was not able to be there for her on this most special occasion.

[好词好句积累]

1.further her study 继续学习 2.due to 由于，因为 3.felt guilty 感到内疚

4.I felt guilty that I was not able to be there for her on this most special occasion. 在这个最特别的时刻，我没能陪在她身边，我感到很内疚 that引导的是同位语从句，解释说明guilty的内容

While I was talking to my school advisor about my term paper the week before my sister's graduation, our conversation changed toward Christmas plans. When I mentioned that I would be missing my sister's graduation by less than 48 hours, she said, “Well, if you want to go, I have no problem with it, so go ahead!\"

[好词好句积累]

1.my school advisor 我的学校导师

2.would be missing 将会错过(过去将来时态)

On hearing the words, I couldn't believe my luck! I nearly jumped for joy. “Just make sure you get permission from administration”, she added. What she said

immediately made my heart sink. The administration at my school was well-known for refusing any sort of time-off requests, let alone last-minute requests, which would undoubtedly draw nothing but anger. I almost didn't bother asking, because I knew it would be hopeless and a waste of time. Plus, I knew the answer already: no. But something in me decided to try, just in case. Maybe it was the hope that the Christmas Spirit would somehow affect the administrative office at this time of year.

[好词好句积累]

1.on hearing the words 一听到这话 2.jumped for joy 高兴地跳起来

3.get permission from 得到……的许可 4.she added 他补充说到 5.let alone 更别说，更别提 6.nothing but=only 只有，仅仅

7.plus/additionally/besides/what’s more 此外 8.something in me 我内心深处 9.just in case 以防万一

10.What she said immediately made my heart sink. 她的话立刻使我的心沉了下来。 what引导的从句是主语从句。 [难词助读]

1.administration 管理部门 2.time-off request 请假请求

When I returned home to find the reply from the administration in my email box, I prepared myself for disappointment.

注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； Paragraph 1:

I took a deep breath, opened the email and started to read. Paragraph 2:

With the ticket, I couldn’t wait to call my sister but suddenly an idea occurred to me.

【写法指导】 一、巧读文 (1)故事要素：

①人物：I, my sister

②时间：before my sister's graduation ③地点：at school and my home

④事件：我向学校管理部门请假去参加我妹妹的毕业典礼。

[分析] 记叙文的首段一般会交代故事的人物、时间、事件等信息。这些信息会对故事的结尾起至关重要的作用，故细读首段尤为重要。

我梦想给人一个终生难忘的惊讶，我的这一梦想实现了。由此可推断出下文应是介绍作者的这个梦想是如何实现的。所以续写时也应着力解决这一问题。 (2)矛盾冲突：

①妹妹即将毕业与我无法参加她的毕业典礼之间的矛盾； ②我的学校安排与圣诞精神(Christmas Spirit)之间的矛盾；

③我向学校申请请假与学校管理部门一向不准请假之间的冲突；

④离我妹的毕业典礼还剩不到48小时与我是否能按时参加典礼之间的冲突 (2)续写线索：

①故事线：妹妹即将在圣诞节前毕业，学校给了我一些工作安排 →我想去参加妹妹毕业典礼，所以去行政办公室请假

→学校行政部门因圣诞精神，最后在毕业典礼前48小时才答应给我放假 (续写1段)：收到行政部门的邮件并打开阅读→？

设问：邮件的内容是什么？我是如何做的(是否能按时参加典礼)？

(续写2段)：拿着票，我迫不及待想给妹妹打电话时突然想到一个主意→？ 我突然想到的是什么？我做了什么？如何呼应开头给人一个惊讶？ ②情感线：沮丧和失望→忐忑不安

(续写第一段)开心、高兴→？我的反映如何？

(续写第二段)激动、理智→？我和妹妹的反应分别是怎样的？ (3) 思考主旨：

给人(我妹妹)一个终生难忘的惊讶。关心、关爱亲人，体现亲情。

【基础训练】

(1)词汇翻译与替换

1.同意，赞同：____________ (v.)→____________ (n.) 2.许可：____________ (v.) →____________ (n.) 3.吃惊的：________________________

4.解释：____________ (v.) →____________(n.)

5.出人意料地：miraculously=________________________ 6.更好：________________________ 7.在一种震惊的状态中____________ 8.揉我的眼睛：____________ 9.抑制我的兴奋：____________

10.提出：________________________ 11.给航空公司打电话：____________ 12.换机票/改签：____________ 13.给某人一个惊喜：____________

14.一直想象着：keeping imagining=____________ 15.张开双臂搂着某人________________________ 16.开心的泪水________________________

17.在某人眼里涌上来________________________ 18.从某人的脸颊滑落 ________________________ (2)按要求完成句子

②我非常震惊，无法抑制自己的兴奋。(汉译英)

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②The only explanation I could possibly put forward (=____________) was that the Christmas Spirit had been hiding in the heart(=____________) of the administrator when she read my last-minute request. (同义替换) ②我一到她家，就用颤抖的双手敲了敲门。

________________________, I knocked at the door________________________ ④门开了，我妹妹站在那里，目瞪口呆。

When the door opened, ____________________________________

⑤My show-up(=____________) at her graduation and my surprising arrival was not only the best Christmas gift(=____________) for her but also the very surprise that would be remembered (=____________) for my lifetime.(同义替换)

答案：

(1)词汇翻译与替换

1.approve (v.)→approval (n.) 2.permit (v.) →permission (n.) 3.shocked/surprised/amazed 4.explain (v.) →explanation (n.)

5.miraculously=surprisingly/unexpectedly 6.much better/much more fantastic 7.in a state of shock 8.rub my eyes

9.contain my excitement 10.come up with/put forward 11.called the airline 12.change my ticket

13.surprise sb./give sb.a surprise 14.keeping imagining=keep picturing 15.throw one’s arms around sb. 16.tears of joy

17.well up in one’s eyes 18.fall down one’s cheeks

(2)按要求完成句子

②I was extremely shocked, failing to contain my excitement. ②come up with，inner

②The instant I arrived at her house, I knocked at the door with my hands trembling. ②When the door opened, there stood my sister, dumbfounded. ②presence，present，kept in mind

三、巧成文

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参考范文： Paragragh1: I took a deep breath, opened the email, and started to read. It was an approval! I got the permission! I rubbed my eyes and couldn’t believe my luck—there must be a mistake. But no. I was extremely shocked, failing to contain my excitement. The only explanation I could possibly come up with was that the Christmas Spirit had been lurking in the heart of the administrator when she read my last-minute request. Immediately, I called the airline. Miraculously, even during the busy Christmas season, I was able to change my ticket to arrive the day before my sister’s graduation. Paragragh2:

With the ticket, I couldn’t wait to call my sister but suddenly an idea occurred to me. Wouldn’t it be so much more fantastic if I could surprise her? On my way to Australia, I kept picturing what a state of shock my sister would be in! The instant I arrived at her house, I knocked at the door with my hands trembling. When the door opened, there stood my sister, dumbfounded. I threw my arms around her, saying “I made it! Happy graduation and merry Christmas!” Tears of joy started welling up in her eyes and falling down her cheeks. My presence at her

graduation and my surprising arrival was not only the best Christmas present for her but also the very surprise that would be remembered for my lifetime.